Narrative Progress & Evaluation
This week we have made a lot of progress – we finished devising the bulk of our material. I think what we have created this week is good and just needs a bit more polishing and sharpening, especially the transitions.
1. Reading the book/Butoh – The piece
opens with Ciara reading from The Red Tree as we planned but instead of
‘birthing’ as it’s quite out of context here we decided to do a Butoh walk from
upstage and come around into the red tree shape. I think this is a good idea
but to be really effective we need to properly learn the Butoh technique of
walking and maybe do some of his other methods at the same time – some people
could be doing flower hands, others could do orchestra head or the
fly-on-your-face twitch.
2. Clock – This time,
however, after Ciara springs up and says ‘cuckoo’ we all say ‘good morning’ in
canon. I think this is effective, but like most of the piece, really needs to
be tightened up and made even quicker and snappier to have the effect we want. I
think we also need to practise timing the clockwork walk and the part where we
go into slow motion.
3. Morning – The
morning routine naturally fits in here now, as it’s like the clock scene is the
alarm clock and then the character is getting ready. I think this is one of our
most polished scenes, and I just need to personally work on making my movements
more clear/dynamic.
4. Mime – We adapted
the next scene from the part in our second attempted narrative where Ciara
gives money to a street mime. Kieran, the mime, stands at the front of a line
and we all stand behind him copying his mime movements in canon. Then we all put
our hands up like stairs when he begs for money. I think we could make a bit
more of this scene as it’s a really nice moment, maybe we could do a bit more
miming in the line before Ciara gives him money.
5. City – On
Thursday we watched a run through back and realised the transition between the
mime and the office looked really sloppy and uninteresting, so we decided to
have Ciara break through the ‘line’ and then we all disburse into a city scene
– like everyone going to the office. We decided to do the Jacques Lecoq technique
to create a subway station with everyone pushing through in a cluster, and then
disburse again before creating a train scene in the same way.
6. Office – This scene
we’ve left mostly unchanged, and I really like it with the music and the four
movements sequences. However I thought that mine and Ciara’s chair duet that
was originally at the end of the scene didn’t really make sense with our new
context and it felt a bit out of place anyway so we have decided to get rid of
it. Now I’m not doing this I need to develop my four movements sequence and
make it more interesting and maybe the movements a bit bigger and more dynamic.
7. Mental breakdown – This is
one of my favourite scenes, which was greatly inspired by Bertroffenheit. One
by one we get up from our chairs and mechanically move to the syllables of
panicked words, for instance, ‘wait,
wait, wait, wait, wait,’ ‘she can’t take anymore’ ‘what’s going on’. However
I think we need to polish it and make it a lot sharper and snappier to be
really effective. After this scene we all naturally felt to lean over Ciara in
a type of dome and I had the idea to do a sort of ‘breathing’ all together
where we rise up and then down a few times and then snap back away on the third
one into our next scene.
8. Birth & V Formation – Although
we originally cut this scene, we decided to put it back in and I think this is
the best place for it. We only got rid of it because we thought we were going
to use it for the beginning but now we aren’t we can use it here, where we
originally wanted it.
9. Blob – This is
where we all go into the ‘blob’ and ignore Breanna, which is one of my
favourite scenes. I think it works really well and it’s quite funny but we
really need to time the pauses between Breanna shouting and us making nonsense
noises because at the minute it’s quite messy.
10. Wonderful Things – Even
though we don’t have the wonderland/looking for the tree narrative anymore, I
still really like this scene and I think it still works really well. It’s
around the middle of the piece and it reminds the audience of the red tree,
almost hinting at what it means (‘hope’).
11. Control – For this scene Will and I use
most of what we already have for our controlling Butoh influenced scene, except
Emily P had the idea that afterwards my line could be ‘you try to control your
life’ or something like that which I really liked. I had the idea that if I
followed my line with something like ‘but it doesn’t work’ and then left the
stage Will could take his mask off for the next scene to flow better. However I
still think my part in this scene is a bit weird and not quite right. I think I
need to do something different in order to make it more interesting but I’m not
sure what yet.
12. Give & give – For this
scene we all stood up on our chairs and then repeated in canon the words ‘and
give’ and then all stepped down in unison and tiredly fell back into our chairs
on until there’s nothing left. Even
though it’s quite a short scene I really like it and I think if we polish and
speed up the canon part a bit more it will look and sound really effective.
13. Stage Scene & Clapping – For this
scene Kieran, Emily and Becky are on stage and have forgotten what they are
supposed to do, based on the scene in the book with the girl on stage. Once
we’ve practised the clap a bit more with the count I think it’ll be easier for
us to stop on time and it will look a lot more effective. I had the idea Kieran
could then say the line from the picture in the book this scene is based on –
‘sometimes you just don’t know what you are supposed to do.’
14. Beast & Therapy – Emily P
had the idea that while the beast is coming to life two people – me and Becky –
sit in chairs near the front of the stage and in a quite Naturalistic contrast
to the rest of the piece talk in a therapy-like conversation. Every time I ask
Becky to talk and she says no, the beast comes closer, until eventually she
says okay stands up and faces ‘her
demon’. I think this is a good idea but we maybe need to develop mine and
Becky’s part a bit more because at the minute it’s a bit flat and doesn’t feel
quite right.
15. Therapy Chairs – I had the
idea that we could all push each other out of the way to swap around in the two
chairs so that at some point we’re all in the therapy chair and all in the
therapist’s chair. We adapted this idea so that everyone stands in a line after
the beast and comes up with a different physical theatre way to swap chairs and
then after we leave the therapist’s chair we go to our original positions of
the red tree. On Thursday we developed the beginning to the sequence a little,
developing more of a dance-like section with Will and Becky, but I think we
need to adapt what everyone else is doing in this because with everyone
following under the cloth it looks really messy and sloppy.
16. Reading the book – For our
ending, Ciara will end up the last one in the chair, finishing reading the book
from where we all left off, paralleling the beginning. We will all be forming
the red tree around her with our red orbs. Then the lights will slowly fade out.
I really like this ending because I like how it parallels the beginning and
shows that hope has always been there from the start even if you (and the
audience) didn’t realise.
Title
This week we have been thinking about names for the piece. Will had the idea that we could call the piece, ‘kuka sina olet’ which is what is written on the girl in the picture of her on the stage. We looked it up and it means ‘who are you?’ in Latin which is relevant.
However I feel like because our piece is quite ambiguous and incoherent, our title needs to at least hint at our story/intention, and kuka sina olet is something that nobody is going to understand
Everyone took this suggestion on board and we agreed to call the piece The Wonderful Things which was one of our original choices. I really like this because it hints at how feelings and bad things are still wonderful and bring you back to hope (the red tree). It also will provide quite a good contrast if the audience are expecting to see something bright and ‘wonderful’.
Poster & Programme
We also started thinking about the poster. Ciara had the idea to have a red tree and with eyes all around it in the darkness, which I really liked. This made me think we could have just a single red leaf, like the one in every page of the book, against a black background, maybe with the same eyes in the dark. However, we thought that might look a bit too much like a Canadian flag. As a solution we decided to have a red tree with a single leaf falling off. I think this will look really effective and interesting.
We needed a little tagline/piece of writing as well as the title on the poster, and I thought we could use the first line of the book – sometimes the day begins with nothing to look forward to. I think this works well and we can also use it on the programme.
Costume
I have also been thinking about costumes this week. Originally we had planned to all have different costumes suited to our characters, but now we are no longer doing the Wonderland plot or the affair plot, I think it will be more effective to be dressed all similarly, or at least have a running theme.
I was thinking we could all wear different styled clothes (to suit our ‘individual within the group’) but with a colour theme so we all match – maybe all in black with something red or all wearing red.
I also think we should al have a red leaf on us somehow. I like the idea of doing this in makeup or face paint around one eye or maybe on our hands.









